chapter two bubbles the hamster

November 13th, 2018 | Posted by Angus in 100wc

preveosly on bubblels and he opend a magic and now i,m about to tell you about whats he was running in exitment his house was pretty and the bricks were yellow like a gorilla,s banana. he got about one million in gold and he got two milillion in money. but he was a nice person so he gave it to the bank. so people could use it to buy houses. he got a car and he was now in the army and he was in it for nine years and he achived two medals just like my mum.

 

she was in the army. bye bye

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  • Ross Mannell (Team 100WC) says:

    Hello Angus,

    Firstly, thank you for using bold to show the five prompt words. It was very easy to find them.

    I liked your use of a simile, “…like a gorilla’s banana.” Similes are where we compare one thing with another of a different kind. You compared bricks to bananas. Well done.

    Keep entering, Angus. Writing and sharing your stories will help you become a good writer.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  • Angus says:

    thank you that is very helpfull and will help me make more posts. from angus



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